Noir for the Age of Collapse

Tag: editing

  • I’ll Cash Her Check In The Morning

    I’ll Cash Her Check In The Morning

    She shivers in the wind like the last leaf on a dying tree. I let her hear my footsteps.

    I rewatched the intro to Sin City, a movie that’s almost old enough to drink in the States. I remember it made quite an impression on me, back then. I’d rewatched it over and over, immersed myself in the gritty world, marveled at the art direction, the visual storytelling. I read the graphic novel, cover to cover. Then I forgot about it for years at a time.

    A random YouTube video brought it back, and I rewatched the intro. In it, Josh Hartnett’s character, revealed at the end to be a killer for hire, seduces and dispatches a woman in a red dress in under three minutes.

    As with many memories, I was hesitant to rewatch it, for fear it would turn out weaker than I remembered, spoiling my evening and soiling my memory.

    I was lucky. It held up great, in all its stylized, pulpy, fan-servicing glory. It’s the over-the-top narration for me, the quintessential expression of noir.

    Re-reading some narration from The Silent Season immediately after, I could see the echoes clearly. It’s as if the film and graphic novel had sat buried deep in my subconscious for twenty years, quietly guiding my fingers as I wrote narration and monologues.

    Does Silent Season Michael strive to show empathy to his targets because I thought that would be interesting, or is he channeling Josh Hartnett’s character from a film that’s twenty years old? Is there a difference?

    I wonder what other influences the editing process will unearth.

  • Very Meta

    Very Meta

    “Now you’re ready for battle, noble warrior,” she said, entering the makeshift shower. “I’ll clean myself under the waterfall. And then I will show you the secrets of my tribe. Terms and conditions apply.”

    I was reviewing a scene that had strong sexual undertones. Yes, the book contains sex scenes, as does the world.

    In any case, for a moment, I felt very pleased with myself for coming up with the “Terms and conditions” part.

    It’s no secret that I touch on themes of late-stage capitalism, commoditization, and other big words that say “life is getting harder for most people”.

    I ended up scrapping the line, because it didn’t really work in the scene, but the feeling of having it there still lingers.

    It brought back memories of youtubers pausing mid-essay, asking me to “please like, subscribe, and hit that bell icon”, hurting immersion and reminding me that, behind the façade, most things are revenue-driven.

    To some extent, it reminded me of maintaining a website, blog, and budding Social Media presence so that I can promote my book, sell it, and hopefully afford to write more.

    So please follow me on the platforms of your choice, share my content with friends, and stay tuned for updates. This is all very meta.

  • The Bleeding Persona

    The Bleeding Persona

    As I was re-reading a chapter to tighten the dialogue, remove extra adverbs, and other general cleanup, I noticed something surprising. Which feels weird to state, considering I was reading my own writing.

    A character’s backstory, hinted at within the chapter, shared a few beats with the protagonist’s. This had happened happened organically in the writing session, without me setting out to write it that way.

    Now I’m left wondering, is this diegetic? Is the protagonist attracting like-minded individuals, or the character exposing this specific aspect of their story to build rapport?

    Or is it writerly, my own subconscious creating an echo of the protagonist, or part of his persona bleeding into other characters?

    I’ll let you know if I ever find out.